Peter F. Martin “Destroyed”
Summary:
This essay is about the use of performance enhancing drugs in sports. And the differences of opinions that some people have on what issues are more important. The effects that the drugs is having on sports, or the effects that the drugs have on the players that use them.
Paraphrase:
The threats posed by performance enhancing drugs on sports are vary real. "They challenge the ideals of sports, passed down to use from the Greeks..." even the concepts we have of modern day sports. In a time before super humans that are the affects of unnatural enhancers started to flood the playing fields. But it is these players, the ones whose health and well being are at stake. They are the really important issue here. More so then the game itself. Which so many fans and other people seem to be focusing there attention on. Charging the ruin of the sport to the vary players who's lives are being so negatively affected by these drugs. Is a game really more important then the players playing it? (Martin, 580-582)
Work cited
Martin, Peter. "Destroyed" The bedford Reader. X.J. Kennnedy, Dorthy M. Kennedy,
and Jane E. Aaron. 11th edition. Boston: Bedford, 2012. 582 Print
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Individuals blogs that I have commented on along with hyperlinks to there posts:
Katrina R. Ayala
Catherine D. Wilson
Hi Leonard,
ReplyDeleteYou summary is very concise and covers the gist of the essay. You may want to utilize your spell check feature to double check your grammar.
Nice to hear you enjoy ancient history!
Cathy,
DeleteThank you for your response, and yes I have to admit that grammar is not my strong suit. After reading your comment I went back and reread my post and found several mistakes that I had missed. I guess I rushed when I read back over it and edited it. And it probably would have helped if I had walked away from it between revising and editing like the our reading assignment recommended doing.
Leonard
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Hi Leonard!
ReplyDeleteYou did a decent job with the summary but I would advise making it even more compact and more your own, if that makes sense? I am just noticing too many similiarities between the original text and your writing, so keep your summaries as concise as possible. The other thing is when you paraphrase, you need to use a parenthetical citation. This means, an in-text citation at the end of where your information came from. It will look like (Martin 582). Your first works cited on here is the correct one. Rid of the other one.
With the last quote, did you mean to insert that quote about paraphrasing? I am a bit confused on how it fits into your quote from the article you agree/disagree with.
As with Cathy, double check spelling and grammar, as there were several errors throughout your blog.